Here I have decided to create alternate conclusions to my seven deadly sins essay. I choose my first one to restate the main points of the essay, I think this was the best one I created because it fits the story the best. By summing up key points it points out to the reader exactly when and where each sin was committed. I thought my second one was okay but not great, it was sort of irrelevant to the story but did hold a purpose to why these sins were so deadly, giving a point to the essay. By analyzing these different types of conclusions I have realized that my original one was not very good. These new ways to conclude my essay such as ending with a question, quote, prediction, fact, restatement ect. have given me a different perspective towards how I could better my original.
Type 1) In this conclusion I am concluding with a restatement of my thesis and key points through out the story.
At Sally Sue's supposed to be enjoyable party in the park, all seven deadly sins were unknowingly successfully committed. The guests engulfment in food indicates gluttony, and Sally's lackadaisical attitude towards preparing gourmet meals for her guests indicated sloth. the rich man asking for money indicates greed, Jim's interest in Sally indicated lust, and his lashing out on her boyfriend indicated wrath and envy. Henry showing off his big catch indicated pride.
Type 2) A recommendation or call to action- urge readers to do specific things relating to the topic.
The seven deadly sins are supposivly very sinful to the catholics and if one commits them to an extent can be shunned from the church. Instead one should embrace their opposites in order to live a successful and kind life. At Sally Sues picnic all of the seven deadly sins were committed to an extreme, not one sin was not committed. If the people at the party were to practice the sins opposites Sally could have enjoyed her seventeenth birthday party without major controversy.
Type 3) Prediction- Concludes with logical predictions, in no place make the essay go a whole other direction.
It is very sinful to engage in these seven deadly sins, and Sally Sues party is just an example of careless teens who dont take to heart the ethics of life. If this behavior in teens keeps up, many will end up with little to no life morals and engage more in these risky sins.
Hi Taylor,
ReplyDeleteWork more on introducintg this blog post. What is it about? Why did you choose each type? It might also help to start with your original conclusion and to critique it a bit.
In the end, which do you think is the best one?
Ms. Basko